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"Untitled" new song for critique! Ahhhhh!

Hello! I just thought id share a song with you that I haven't really shared before now with anyone. Its not funny, like most of the other ones I have been writing lately, but I like it for its simplicity and honesty. I'm not sure about the words in the chorus. They just kind of came out and I stuck with them in the end. I have a awkward relationship with words sometimes. Its as though they take precedence over content at times and I have to work around them. Anyway, I'd love to know what you think. Please send feedback.

Here's a morning-horse to inspire you for the New Year! :

Erin xx

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UNTITLED.mp3, 3.5 MB

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Permalink Reply by Erin K on January 7, 2009 at 4:38pm: By the way, sorry for the guitar playing. I really am trying very hard! xx; ▶ Reply to This

Permalink Reply by Tim 'tbone' Tapling on January 7, 2009 at 5:53pm: Hi Erin ..
been there got the 't' shirt ( and the scars )
'bittersweet goodbye' .. nice , honest and emotive.

half the charm here is the niavity of the guitar parts !

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Permalink Reply by SLUMDOG on January 7, 2009 at 6:51pm: Nice song.
Going through a bit of a shit time in my relationship with my wife just now and to hear a song like this makes me feel a bit better about life.
Love the melancholy. Guitar playing sounds not bad. Just right for the mood of the song.
Nice one.
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Permalink Reply by Erin K on January 8, 2009 at 11:04am: I'm sorry to hear that. Hope you two work things out soon! But I'm happy you like it. I wrote it when I was feeling a bit down about someone and it brought me up a bit as well. But not to the point where I lost perspective. Music is great for that kind of thing. xx; ▶ Reply to This

Permalink Reply by Stu. on January 9, 2009 at 1:12pm: Hi Erin. It all fits the way it is, I don't think this song should & could be done any other way. It's quirky, some of the lyrics don't fit & the playing isn't perfect, just the way it should be.

It's a simple & honest style. Well done for knowing 7 chords, I think I'm up to about 10 (that's over a year learning each one).
I enjoyed listening.

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Permalink Reply by Sketchy on January 13, 2009 at 12:15pm: Hi Erin.

I like your voice v much. I think the innocence of the guitar definitely fits the song well. I think the 2 nd guitar part also marries well as do your vocal harmonies.

Best regards

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Permalink Reply by Dean"Vernon Leroy" Lusby on January 28, 2009 at 8:54pm: Erin, sounds great to me. Love when the extra vocal kicks in. I could see the whole song done with two vocals and possibly a duet. you have a nice voice. The more you play the better the guitar will get it wouln't be as cool if the guitar was perfect.; ▶ Reply to This

Permalink Reply by GayleMyrna on January 30, 2009 at 5:38pm: Nice song...I like the vocal harmony at the end and overall simplicity of the arrangement. One thing that might enhance it is to make the vocals a bit louder...and/or guitar a bit softer so the voice can be heard distinctly.
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